One day Richie Mccaw was taking his daily jog, he takes the same circuit everyday. One day he noticed a different person taking a walk, he was a very blinkered man. Richie kept jogging and went into the park, he was trying to get away from that blinkered man. But Richie heard mumbling behind him, so he turned around. But behind him was the blinkered man, so Richie started to run. Richie turned into a dark alleyway to get away from the blinkered man. Richie saw the man walk past and he let out a sigh of relief. But when Richie started to walk out of the alleyway Richie felt a hand with a firm grip on his shoulder. Duun Dun Duuunn (find out what happens… never)
This is only a quick 5 minute quick write and we needed to write a story with conflict and make it about a sports person, it could've been real or fake.
Hi Bridget very exiting quick write, I like how you did not tell us what happened next for it made your story sound so scary! Next time as an improvement you could use different words:)
ReplyDeleteHi Tara thank you for commenting on my blog! Thanks for giving me that feedback but remember it is only 5 minutes to write and edit,I made the story end on a cliffhanger on purpose,
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